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Literature
Gift Wrapped
“So, it's Peter’s birthday tomorrow.” I nodded absently at Kevin’s declaration, absorbed in my story.
“Yes.”
“Do you know what you're getting him?” He pressed. I rolled my eyes, annoyed.
“Yes. We're going out,” I said shortly. Kevin chuckled.
“Don't you want to know what gonna get him?” I finally looked up, a scowl twisting my features.
“What?” He grinned.
“You.” I blinked once, then he pulled out a roll of red ribbon. “Now turn around.” My eyes widened, and I put my hands up.
“Oh, no. Nonononono.” He smiled innocent
Literature
Summer camp - Part 1
This is a follow up on my story 'Summer Camp Trial Run', published on DA and Tugstories.com website. “Eight hours. A whole eight hours it had been since the start of camp, before my wrists were tightly tied behind my back.” Sam thought, with a smile on her face. “Why are you smiling?” one of the cowboys responsible for her current situation asked. The cowboys were six boys of twelve years old that had captured her while she had been walking back from the lake at the camp site to the cabins. It was just after five in the afternoon and the kids had some free time before dinner. Earlier that day Sam, short for Samantha, had driven to the camp site and had settled into the female leader cabin. During the camp meeting, held before the kids arrived, she had met the other leaders. There were twelve of them, eight women and four men, for thirty kids. The camp owner had shown them around the camp. Only three of the leaders had been at this camp before, so everything was new to most of them.
Literature
Unexpected Visitor
It had been a long day. College had dragged and dragged and once again, I found myself musing how much easier things had been when I was a kid. Back then sure, it had seemed plenty complicated, but now?
Oh to have that blissful ignorance back. Six-year old Matthew Winters had no idea he'd had it so good.
Now, and now in particular, it coming to end of my last year at college, my days were filled with classes crammed with study, and my evenings were equally as crammed with study and assignments. It never seemed to end. More and more often it seemed I just didn't have time to do the things I wanted, or to slow down and relax, take it easy.
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It's Kaatryn~! So, I'm making this story as a contest entry for a little contest Finally... Plus Christmas contest! (Blarg) being held by once again involving the BDSM Sorority, back to their old tricks~
Kaatryn "Kat" belongs to
The BDSM Sorority belongs to me
Kaatryn "Kat" belongs to
The BDSM Sorority belongs to me
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The pacing and structure of this story is really rather good. I like having the story begin where her predicament ends up but without spoiling anything, saving the stinger in the story until the end reveal.
There's a few spelling and grammar issues here and there (two she's where I think another word was supposed to be for instance) but it doesn't detract from the reading any (and frankly I'm a little picky when it comes down to it).
I also love the descriptions of the outfits and various things that are used. It really gives me a clear image of the action. I love descriptive stories and I get a good sense of things with this.
I think this is a pretty nice quality piece. Good work overall.