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It's Kaatryn~! So, I'm making this story as a contest entry for a little contest Finally... Plus Christmas contest! (Blarg) being held by :iconkaatryn: once again involving the BDSM Sorority, back to their old tricks~
Kaatryn "Kat" belongs to :iconkaatryn:
The BDSM Sorority belongs to me :iconlittleshiro-kun:
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:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Impact

The pacing and structure of this story is really rather good. I like having the story begin where her predicament ends up but without spoiling anything, saving the stinger in the story until the end reveal.

There's a few spelling and grammar issues here and there (two she's where I think another word was supposed to be for instance) but it doesn't detract from the reading any (and frankly I'm a little picky when it comes down to it).

I also love the descriptions of the outfits and various things that are used. It really gives me a clear image of the action. I love descriptive stories and I get a good sense of things with this.

I think this is a pretty nice quality piece. Good work overall.